What Worked: Savanna's speech felt like she was speaking to us not at us,
and I could really tell that physical education meant something to her, she was
passionate and real. Her use of Narrative with her personal stories
really drew me in and made it interesting; she started out with the funny
little story about how the little boy loved her braces. Then she went
into persuasion and research with her statistics on the percent of kids in gym
classes, and this fit well with her next point that kids need to exercise for
health and for fun because it gives them so much joy, which helps persuade us
to see why physical education is important and why it’s so important to
her. She was well organized and had great tone.
What didn't work: There were a few times when she would look back at the
power point and look back for reference, which wasn't so bad but can be
improved upon. I also noticed a few verbal tics where she would say and
"yeah" or "so” to transition. The video was a little long
and I lost interest when she stopped explaining and talking about the video. I
think she could have gone a little more in depth with the research with
solutions to the problem or talked about how she would change that in her
career.
How to Improve: Rehearsing will help take care of the reliance on
the power point and help build confidence, and with transitions. When you
aren’t talking I get bored so shorten any videos or cut them off sooner if you aren’t
going to explain or talk about them. Could possibly do more research to
bolster your points, tell us why it’s not good to cut Gym, and how we can solve
the problem.
Overall Savanna's speech was great, the points were easy to follow and the
stories and personal narrative worked the best. Her expression showed that she
really cared about what she was talking about, which helped with her confidence
in speaking and engaged us. Also props for going first.
No comments:
Post a Comment